What do you think of this story please tell me how to improve it?

This story is the greatest story ever actually the thing is u can improve this story by writing ur real feelings and how u felt. I have experienced this situuation a lot of times but you gotta show or tell ur real feelings, how u felt and wat was the result, u got to be more specific otherwise this story is great and u can be a good writer one day, i ure you. But can u tell me are u a writer or justa normal school student cz im an average school student and i need help in my english too as i also like to tell stories. Pls!!